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Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! Sign up below with your name, blog and email and share an 8 to 10 sentence snippet of your writing on Sunday. Your post needs to be live between 12:00 noon on Saturday 09/10/16 and 09:00 AM on Sunday 09/11/16. Visit the other participants on the list and read, critique and comment on their 8sunday posts. Last time I was sharing from The Opal Ring a short story I have coming out in the 2016 Horror Anthology from Tell-Tale Publishing being released in October at their annual online Halloween Horror Party--see sidebar banner regarding upcoming event for this year. Most folks agreed from my first sharing of The Opal Ring, that they hate the uncle--with good reason. So far we know the father's a magician and the mother has died so the daughter, Jasmine, is his assistant. She "aids" her father with a bit of her own "real" magic to enhance his show as she wants him to get a Las Vegas contract so they can leave Egypt and escape her vile uncle. I'll continue with a bit more from the same short story. This would be the second time she summoned the Jinn, and she knew what to expect, she told herself. Taking a deep breath, Jasmine rubbed the ring on the middle finger of her right hand. The air around her crackled and sparked, a pillar of fire shot from floor to ceiling, swirling like a tornado, scorching hot, with pain but no damage, like hell, and in a puff of black smoke it disappeared. In its place stood an eight foot Jinn, Ornias, once enslaved by King Solomon to carve stones for the building of the temple. According to the mystic tomes, his enslavement was punishment for stealing gems from the royal treasury, gems he craved for their sparkling light. He would sink his vampire-like fangs into them and drain their glimmer in an effort to relieve the agony of eternal darkness—a life without the sun’s blessing. This was the addiction Jasmine must feed in order to command the demonic Jinn’s magic. She concluded that his explosive manner of reappearance was certainly that of an escaping addict and it in no way reassured her. The Jinn was manlike in appearance, save that his skin was ebony not in an African ebony way, but more like a preternatural obsidian sheen with eyes that glowed golden like a cat’s, but with a sunset luster that spoke of darker, more underground locales than mountaintops or beach horizons. “I hunger!” he bellowed. I hope you enjoyed the snippet I posted from Elizabeth's scary story this week. I have decided that Jinn's are to be avoided at all costs! If I see one I am going to bite it and swallow its ring! I don't think I need to explain what will happen to it then! Please be sure to follow all the other Weekend Writing Warriors and #SnippetSunday authors to find some more great reads!--Hudson, off to play with my new frien Fang and make him howl so Elizabeth will laugh!
39 Comments
9/11/2016 06:30:34 am
And what does he hunger for? Intriguing snippet!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:25:07 am
That's the really horrific part....
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9/11/2016 08:33:35 am
I love the detail of his addiction to the sparkly gemstones and why. Really a cool excerpt!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:26:13 am
Oh,thank you so much for your kind words, Veronica. It's just this sort of feedback that keeps me going!
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Daryl Devore
9/11/2016 08:59:02 am
Nice snippet.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:26:58 am
Very sweet. Thanks, Daryl!
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Jess Schira
9/11/2016 09:25:02 am
Amazing it of descriptive writing!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:27:44 am
Wow, thank you, Jess!
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9/11/2016 10:13:01 am
Great description of this guy! He sounds scary- hope she's got a lot of sparklies for him.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:28:50 am
Thanks, Christina...she better learn to rob banks, huh?!
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9/11/2016 04:10:32 pm
Love the description of the Jinn. Very powerful.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:29:49 am
Thanks, Karen! I appreciate that!
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Elaine Cantrell
9/11/2016 07:15:23 pm
Lovely descriptive passage.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:30:49 am
I appreciate your kind words, Elaine!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:31:46 am
Amy, that's such a huge compliment coming from you! Thanks!
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9/11/2016 09:06:53 pm
"I hunger." Oh shit. I scared.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:32:46 am
You're hilarious, Teresa! Thanks!
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9/11/2016 09:11:03 pm
This is a very effective evocation of the djinn's appearance. I like it.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:33:33 am
Thanks, Ed. I appreciate that!
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9/11/2016 10:44:53 pm
Great description and world-building. Would love to know how she got the ring but for right now I'm more curious as to how she uses the Jinn.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:34:41 am
Thanks, P.T. Glad I am creating curiosity!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:35:42 am
Thanks, Rin! I appreciate your kind words and feedback!
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Diane Burton
9/12/2016 07:27:57 am
Whoa. Great description of that Jinn. He would scare me half to death.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:36:48 am
Excellent, Diane! Good to know.
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9/12/2016 12:55:54 pm
Sounds like a being I'd rather not play with. Good snippet, Elizabeth.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:37:53 am
Thanks, Siobhan! I appreciate the feedback!
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9/12/2016 06:35:45 pm
I love the idea of a story about a Jinn! Interesting and unique!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:43:24 am
Thanks, MJ! You're always so sweet!
Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:38:55 am
Thanks, Kara! I'm glad he's having the desired effect!
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9/13/2016 12:22:42 am
The jinn doesn't seem like the most friendly character but at the same time I don't think I would be too friendly if I had been prisoner for so long.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:40:06 am
Good point, Linda! It certainly explains his hunger!
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9/13/2016 10:52:49 am
What a wonderfully imaginative story! Loved the vivid description in this snippet. Looking forward to reading more!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:41:13 am
Oh, thanks so much, Joyce. Also so great to hear such kind words from you!
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Elyzabeth M. VaLey
9/15/2016 09:56:33 am
Great description, very vivid snippet.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
9/18/2016 07:42:20 am
Thanks so much, Elyzabeth! I appreciate the feedback so much!
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9/18/2016 09:11:02 pm
Great descriptions! This sounds like one pissed off entity, and I think I would feed it if I was her. I wonder why she's summoning it though.
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