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Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…a fun way to sample new books and find new authors! (Also welcome to the Sunday Snippet visitors!) Last week in my weekly snippet from my WIP Rodrigo discovered that there were Zombies in the rainforest, created by his former partners who were testing experimental drugs on the forest natives. In this snippet, Isis has arrived and is observing Kirin at work. Making Music Her lavender silk gown flows softly behind her as Isis approaches the bedside on noiseless leather sandals. A young forest maiden thrashes upon the gurney. In an effort to prevent her from injuring herself, they limit her movement with the use of a multitude of strappings at her neck, mid-drift, waist, thighs, shins, ankles, biceps and wrists. She conducts an orchestra of click-clanks with the metal O-rings of her padded restraints, playing them all at random, disjointed intervals. The sound is disturbing in the small chamber. Kirin seems impervious to the metallic melody as she instead stands before a machine putting out more measured electronic beeps and studies jagged, moving lines on an illuminated display next to the bed, her face pale from weeks underground. She taps the screen of a personal computer tablet in her hand, scribbles a notation and sighs. Fine lines of concern furrow her porcelain forehead as she frowns. Dark smudges under her eyes bear witness to the countless hours she has spent in the lab and in this and other clinical rooms nearby, trying to reverse the damage caused by the serum Set’s minions have administered. For most of them, my help will mean little more than allowing them the dignity of death, Kirin admits sadly. I hope you enjoyed this week's snippet. Please read the fine entries by the other Weekend Writing Warriors and #SnippetSunday Authors!
36 Comments
5/22/2016 01:49:39 am
That picture accompanying this snippet added a whole new level of menace to the words.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 12:34:23 pm
That was a rather creep find, wasn't it?
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5/22/2016 06:13:20 am
Great imagery! I can feel the helplessness of the situation, but I hope Kirin is able to find a cure.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 12:35:18 pm
Thanks, Jessica. Here's hoping!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 12:35:59 pm
Thanks, Nancy!
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5/22/2016 07:07:37 am
I really enjoy your use of the present. I find it a huge challenge to use. I also enjoy how you split her compassion and disengagement.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 12:37:10 pm
Thanks, Kim. It's something I am currently struggling with myself, so I appreciate the kind words.
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5/22/2016 10:20:44 am
You've done a great job portraying the gravity and hopelessness of the situation!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 12:38:26 pm
Thanks, Christina. It makes the magic that much more glorious.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 12:39:17 pm
True, Botonist. She's the heart of the family for sure.
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Evelyn Jules
5/22/2016 03:41:24 pm
Wow, very powerful snippet! The description is so vivid and terrifying, really. The final line gave me a chill. Wonderful work!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 03:56:51 pm
Thanks, Evelyn!
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5/22/2016 04:27:36 pm
Dark goings-on, well described scene, intriguing excerpt.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 08:27:04 pm
Thanks for the kind words, Veronica!
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5/22/2016 06:03:20 pm
I was disturbed, reading this snippet, fearful for the forest maiden. There's subtle tension there. You did well, Elizabeth, pushing this reader out of her comfort zone. :-)
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 08:28:03 pm
Oh-oh! Didn't mean to be pushy, Teresa! LOL!
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Daryl Devore
5/22/2016 06:58:43 pm
fabulous imagery - skin crawling kind of imagery. Especially at the end of the snippet. Tweeted.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 08:28:54 pm
Thanks so much, Daryl!
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5/22/2016 07:19:21 pm
This sounds like a bad situation, but the imagery is fabulous.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 08:29:53 pm
Thanks for the kind words, Elaine. I appreciate you stopping by!
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VAdams
5/22/2016 07:32:37 pm
so cold and...stuck for the word - chilling - creepy - then you put that picture in - chills up my spine.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/22/2016 08:30:56 pm
Oh, wow, thanks so much, VAdams!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/23/2016 02:31:24 am
That's what they say, P.T.
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/23/2016 02:35:28 am
Oops. Guess I missed the reply box...it's below. Thanks, Amy!
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/23/2016 02:34:09 am
I am reminded just now of, "Listen to them. The children of the night. What beautiful music they make." Buwaaaaahhhhhh!!!
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5/23/2016 08:45:14 am
Wonderfully done. So dark and creepy. The photo you found- priceless. Definitely sets the mood even darker. :)
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Elizabeth Alsobrooks
5/23/2016 10:40:04 am
Thanks, Karen!
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5/24/2016 04:11:52 pm
Wow, very scary and disturbing, yet also filled with some beautiful phrases. Great snippet!
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Iris
5/26/2016 05:41:52 am
intriguing ... nice descriptions.
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5/26/2016 08:59:29 am
"For most of them, my help will mean little more than allowing them the dignity of death," Such a poignant line. Great visuals
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5/28/2016 02:16:24 pm
So dreadful and creepy. She doesn't seem to be enjoying it at all, I wonder what she is really doing here.
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